Martha Brentwood stood stoic against the first arctic gale of the season, as she waited for the number-seven to carry her to Saint Ann’s Cathedral for the sixth time in two years. A trip she never got used to. The harsh breath of winter bit at her as rabid flecks of crystalline powdered snow threatened to bury her where she stood. Her mourning-black Cashmere coat was faded by time, and it did nothing to cover her bare hands, but she didn’t shiver, she didn’t blink, and she didn’t move. Her heart was warmed by the precious memories of Anna, as she recalled their first encounter at the fourth street USO where they both worked so many years ago…Lost in her memories she hadn’t heard the number-seven slide to a halt in front of her—she was somewhere in time.
A barrel chested man bounced off the bus with the grace of a younger man. His chiseled features, leather skin, and gray hair—all marked by time, gave him the look of distinguished charm, contrasted only by his simple black slacks, and weathered pea coat. Blinded by the snow he stumbled to a halt mere inches from the statuesque beauty before him. Her soft-powdered-pale skin was nearly lost in the backdrop of winter’s fury. But her sea-green eyes and luscious ruby lips cast a luminescent glow like a watch keepers lantern meant to guide lost sailors home. He knew this beauty, and rusted memories of a love long past broke free from their moors as he recalled a four day furlough, a sailors first kiss, an enchanted honey moon, and a sobered divorce sent first class mail from Normandy.
“Martha—Martha, are you ok dear?” Martha was pulled back into the ferocity of the storm as her memories faded back into the shadows of yesteryear.
“Excuse me, do I know you?” Martha asked.
“It’s me, your ex-husband, John Brentwood.” As frozen tears of remembrance welled in her eyes, John asked, “Where are you going, Martha?”
“I’m going to say good bye to an old friend at Saint Ann’s.”
“Me too,” John said, “but why are you standing here?”
“I’m waiting for the number-seven to take me there,” Martha said with a tremble in her voice.
“Martha, honey, you’re standing in front of Saint Ann’s.”
Startled by this revelation, Maratha’s knees buckled and John reached out to her. As they clasped hands, the cold-cheap -gold bands they had given one another over half a century ago were reunited. But this reunion was cut short by the somber chimes of funeral bells.
They turned, facing the marble steps of Saint Ann’s, solemnly remembering why they were there. It was Anna who had introduced them all those years ago, it was Anna who had brought them together on this day, and it was Anna they were going to see. Arm in arm, walking silently, they faded into the storm as they climbed the last twenty-three steps to good-bye.
Terry Elkins (whyguy)
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I loved this story – the beginning was evocative; I could feel the cold and smell and taste it too. I felt empathy for the old lady and likewise for the man – but in a different way. She was the centre – the story radiated around her, while he was a catalyst, starkly revealing intriguing pieces of information.
Reading other comments, I am assuming that this is not the complete story – shame, as I can’t viably make a concluding assessment of your piece. The closing sentence (and the title derived from it) doesn’t have meaning, other than describing a very clear image – but short stories need to have intrinsic symbolic closure – is this because this is not the complete work? – or have I missed something? (being foreign to US)
However, the English, the flow, the atmosphere, were fantastic – it was almost like a dream that was more convincing, more real than real life. Very enjoyable, and moving.
Gerry, I’m gonna email you with some questions as to how I can make this piece better. I knew it was missing something, but being a piece of flash fiction I tried to keep it short, and sprinkle clues as to what was going on in the story through out the piece. If you missed it, then I didn’t do my part as a writer. Your insights are invaluable to me at this stage of my writing, and I take all of your critiques very seriously, and am most appreciative. Thanks Gerry
Very nice story. I did find myself wanting more. Had you published any material? I would live to read something you have published.
John and Marsha, sounds like the old comedy skit i remember as a kid….
“John…Marsha…John…Marsha…John…Marsha…”
This story was published at the Pittsburgh Gazette at http://pittsburghflashfictiongazette.com/. I have been working hard at becoming a better writer and it is my hope that I’ll get published soon. I plan on sending my work to publishers sometime within the next 6 months if not sooner.
Mike, I remember that skit, that’s all they say through the whole thing. Toooo funny.
Thanks for for stopping by, and as soon as I get my first piece published I’ll give you an autographed copy. LOL
An excellent story. I’m proud to have you as a Guest Writer at the Pittsburgh Flash Fiction Gazette.
I am honored that you felt my work good enough to publish it on the Pittsburgh Gazette.
Thanks Guy
This one is one of my favorites.
Thanks, but I would have thought All Day would have been your favorite. I’m glad you enjoyed this one, it’s one of my favorites too.
Very nice Terry! I really like it. Jody
Thanks Jody. I really appreciate your support and the kindness you always show me.
Terry
Great job… another story I would read.
Thanks for stopping by Terry, I’m glad you enjoyed it.
will you PLEASE finish your stories!!! i get started and its over
;i love your stories i just would like to read one in entirity!!! You are an excellent writer as I have said before you draw people in with only a couple of paragraphs. BUT I WANT TO READ IT ALL, greedy arent I.
LOL
Karen
Karen, you have me cracking up. Give me some time and I’ll add to these stories. They’re not called teasers for nothing. LOL
You’re kinda greedy, but in a nice way. Are you going to let me post your success story on here under my Atkins thread?